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Cheap Seats

Copyright © 2009 Ernest Bloom.


"Lord, what fools these mortals
be!" Puck declared, and I, from
the cheap seats, was sudden-
struck by such simple wisdom.
We're all ensnared in visions
blind, or binding brute bad luck.
Should you, by chance, one day
become unstuck and waken
from your nightmare in a
dream, I hope you'll pick a daisy
and then pluck its petals,
weighing what my love might
mean, for though I know you
can't believe it's true, you'll
know no greater love than
mine for you.

4 comments:

  1. Gosh, could be the bard himself to have composed this adorable love piece. The rhythm makes the poem flow seemlessly and it really is a joy to read.

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  2. sometimes, as here, i experiment, writing in one meter, and then cutting it up in another. this originally in iambic pentameter, w rhymes:

    declared/sudden-struck/ensnared/bad luck/unstuck/a dream/then pluck/might mean,

    followed by a closing couplet. idk if that clarifies anything....

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  3. "Visions blind." I liked how you phrased this line--it's very courtly.

    "Should you, by chance, one day become unstuck..." That's one of those lines that sticks with you for your entire life. Bravo.

    The rhyming worked well :)

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  4. visions blind.......i had on my mind that quote from a midsummernight's dream for a few days, trying to figure out why. gradually i knew it was cos we spend so much time reinforcing unpleasantness in our lives to maintain the status quo while actively fending off what would profit us as human beings: fools indeed in such short lives, a theme i've been hitting heavily of late.

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